ホームステイ先への手紙の添削をお願いします。 Dear families 家族のみんなへ。 ...

ホームステイ先への手紙の添削をお願いします。



Dear families

家族のみんなへ。

Hello!Thank you for your letter and photos.


こんにちは！手紙と写真ありがとう。

I was very happy to read it.

とても嬉しかったよ。

Mary looks so cool and Jim looks gentle.

メアリー(ママ)はとてもかっこいいし、ジム(パパ)は優しそう。

Alice looks mature.How I envy her!

アリスは大人っぽいね。羨ましいなあ。

In spite of my age, I looks younger than her If I stand next to her.

私の方が年上なのに、もし私たちが並んだら、私の方が年下に見えちゃいそう。

During my homestay,I want to see her ballet dance.

ホームステイの間に、彼女のバレエダンス(踊るところ)を見たいな。

I hope to see Carol and David too.

キャロルとデービッドにも会えたらいいな。

Licolice is cute name!

リコリスって可愛い名前だね。

I want to play with him soon.

早くリコリスと遊びたいな。

I have a Wii game too.

Wiiなら私も持ってるよ！

What kind of game for Wii game do you have?

どんなソフトを持ってるの？

I have to practice it because I don't play it much recently.

最近私はあまりやらないから、たくさん練習しなきゃ！

Hiking!It sounds fun!

ハイキング楽しそう！

I like shopping.

お買い物好きだよ。

I'm looking forward to both doing.

どっちも楽しみだな。

Learning recipes too.

料理のレシピ覚えるのも楽しみ！

I'll take a notebook for making notes of recipes.

Please teach me many recipes.

レシピ用のノート持っていくから、たくさん教えてね。

May I ask you a some questions?

少し質問してもいいかな？

家族のみんなに会えることを楽しみにしてます。

I'm looking forward to seeing families.



よろしくお願いします。

Dear Mr.& Mrs. ***, （相手の名前を書きましょう）



How are you?

Thank you so much for your letter and photos. I was very happy to receive them.

Mary, you look so cool and Jim looks kind/gentle.

I envy Alice looking so mature for her age. I am afraid I will probably look like a young kid in spite of my age,

(注：あまり歳比べの話題をしないのでここ少々違和感がありました故少々表現を変えました）

I would love to see her ballet dance while I am there.

I'd like to meet Carol and David, too.

Licorice（たぶんスペルを間違っておられるようなので書き換えました。） is a cute name. I can't wait to play with him soon.(

（同じ表現Looking forward to-が短い手紙の中で多すぎるので書き換えました）。



I have a Wii, too.

What kind of Wii games do you have? I need to practice a bit since I haven't played with it for a while.



Hiking sounds fun! I like shopping, too. I am looking forward to doing them both.

Learning how to cook also sounds fun.

I will bring a note book with me to write down your recipes.

I hope you don't mind me asking questions during cooking, and hope I learn as many recipes as possible from you.



I look forward to seeing you.



Sincerely,



Your Name



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